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« on: November 23, 2006, 05:42:11 PM »

The heavenly white sea of snow would of looked beautifle, if it were not for the death it was about to lie under. The cold chilling winds blew past me, pushing away from me, my enemy would have to push against it. An advantage i would think, but you never know how these creatures will react to the weather. On a side note, the number of their horde probally made a wind itself with them moving simultaneously together. But, i was untroubled by all of this, this was my my mission, my duty, my oath to show Courage and Honour in the face of death, and smite him with the might of the Emperor.
     
     The comm link in my helmet opened, it was Captain Invictus, this was it. He began to chant the battle prayers, giving us un-ending strength and a will seconded only to the Emperor himself.
     
     "Into the fires of battle we go. We are the Ultramarines, warriors of the Emperor, and our bravery is beyond question! It is the stuff of the soul-forge, stronger than adamantium and enduring as the Immortal Emperor Himself. The fires of battle are our places of worship, the roar of bolters our prayers, and the slaughter of our foes an offering to the gods of battle!" Roared the Brother-Captain.
   
      "Our bolters are charged with death," replied myself and my brothers "They are the divine wrath of the Emperor!"

      The sky darkened as if the sun set, but i knew it not, the sun was still aloft high in the sky. A great evil approached. I couldn't hear anything, not a single shuffle, not one of us moved, we stood firm, ready to face the enemy.

      Suddenly, the ground started to feel uneasy, shakes shook the settled snow of the walls.

     "Men, this is it. Aim true brothers. Make them pay with lakes of blood for every metre they gain. We are the Ultramarines of the 1st Company, and we will hold this fortress to the last man!" Roared Captain Invictus, while clenching his enormous power fist "We shell not falter Brothers."

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it was only a matter of time before i did this. im not gonna tell u wot it is, but some of u may be able to gather anyway.
Also, Captain Invicuts was the actual leader of the 1st company at this battle, no making it up for me  Cool
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« Reply #1 on: November 24, 2006, 05:35:13 PM »

Aha, it's the thing you told on irc right?

Thus far I like it, gives a chilly atomosphere. The writing was nice and I especially liked the battle prayer thingy. Hard to give really any critique at this point of the story. I'm waiting for the next part...
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« Reply #2 on: June 09, 2008, 02:34:26 AM »

It was quite good.  Could do with some grammatical correction but whatever.

And, ehe, you don't fool me.  This part in the middle with the speech was taken from this story: http://uk.games-workshop.com/spacemarines/nimbosa/1/.

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"Into the fires of battle we go. We are the Ultramarines, warriors of the Emperor, and our bravery is beyond question! It is the stuff of the soul-forge, stronger than adamantium and enduring as the Immortal Emperor Himself. The fires of battle are our places of worship, the roar of bolters our prayers, and the slaughter of our foes an offering to the gods of battle!" Roared the Brother-Captain.

"Our bolters are charged with death," replied myself and my brothers "They are the divine wrath of the Emperor!"


Plagiarism is baaad man! A sin for writers everywhere!
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